When a recent spike in demonic activity leads to the murder of their friend, Misaki Kimura and Amaya Bellerose begin their investigation into the reason for his murder. Through the use of special keys, that open gates from world to world, they fight to purify corrupted souls from demonic influences and destroy lost souls that are beyond saving. Can they uncover the reason for the recent spike in the human world’s demonic activity and put the spirits of darkness to rest, or will they, too,  become lost in the darkness that seeks to envelope the world?

First thing I want to voice before I start this review, is that the website can be a bit finicky at times. Please don’t let this deter you from reading the comic. Just come back and try again a different time. Also, sorry about the quality of the images. That was a technical difficulty as well, and I’ll try to fix them when I get the chance.

Story

F/W (Foxy and Wolfy): Chaos is created by a fairly large team, but for the sake of simplicity, I’ll refer to them as the F&W team. F/W: Chaos has a fascinating world with great concepts and ideas.

Cleansing spirits and releasing them.

However, those concepts feel as if they were never fully formulated. It’s as if the reader has been thrown right into the middle of the plot. This can sometimes work, as long as there is a character in the story that has no idea what’s going too, so that the world can be explained to the readers without any hiccups in plot or conversation. That isn’t the case here. A friend of the main character has been murdered in the very beginning of the story, and it feels as if I’m missing some vital parts of the plot.

The subtle emotions and the long speech take away from an otherwise dramatic scene.

The attempt of intrigue for the plot is definitely there, though. Starting off a story with a big action scene is always a great way to try and bring people into reading a comic. It just needs a bit of tweaking in the introduction so that the reader gathers more information than what is given. It is currently too vague.

It’s important to remember to take a step back and ask yourself, “If I didn’t know anything about the world and the characters, would I be able to understand what is going on?”  Build scenes in a way that they verbally or physically tell the reader what is happening. This is especially important in the first chapter.

Writing

Aside from the vague concepts, the writing is actually not bad. Occasionally the conversations felt too formal, or scripted. A common area that people struggle with here is introducing new characters.

I would be very uncomfortable in this conversation. Why are we all talking so weird? And why are you trusting a demon you just met?

Also, don’t forget about culture and human nature in conversations. Keep in mind that when, for example, the humans encounter a demon for the first time, they would probably be cautious, or feel an immediate threat. It is a bit odd for them to greet the demons by asking them to be friends. On top of this, they should also be very weary of some sort of trap if a demon invites them to a dinner party. These demons haven’t proven anything to the humans that they can be trusted. If you were in that situation and knew the history of demonic violence, wouldn’t you be a bit cautious?

Make friends with the enemy. Brilliant.

Moving on, watch for grammar mistakes. I don’t recall seeing any spelling errors, so that’s awesome! There are a few areas where, because the language is so formal, it sounds strained and scripted. Some sentence structures could be rearranged to help with the flow.

Bring that last speech bubble before the second one (after she introduces her name), and the sentence will become more fluid.

Also, read the conversations out loud. Do they sound natural to you? If not, try running the script with someone else and freeform it a bit. Improvise the script. That tends to be a much more natural dialect and you can get some good tips from it for future conversations.

Pardon me?

Art

Onwards to art! The F&W team reveals their strength lies within the artwork. There are some absolutely gorgeous panels in F/W: Chaos. The colour combinations are also fantastically bright and complimentary.

Where the conversation struggles with flow, the paneling and art do not. They help move a scene from one motion to the next with excellent precision. The reader is easily able to fill in the spaces between each panel, making the scene move with ease.

One thing I’d say is a common mistake in a lot of comics, is matching script to art. Sometimes the emotions of the character don’t quite fit with what they are saying. Make sure that these two match and the scene will have a much stronger effect on the emotions of the readers.

I expected more anger in her face, more grief.

Last, but certainly not least, is the movement and action scenes. These are magnificently done –which is important considering that the comic does revolve around them. The F&W team has a clear understanding of proportion and the usefulness of different angles. These have been used to their benefit, especially during these action scenes.

Brb. Kicking some demonically possessed butt.

 

Conclusion

Overall, I think that F/W: Chaos has some great potential. As this is only the first chapter, I’m sure more information will be explained and given to the readers as time progresses. There is a lot that is inferred that the reader can catch on with quickly enough if they already know something about magic girl style comics.


 

If you want to read F/W: Choas by the F&W team, check it out here!