“Clarus Kaul, a sixteen year old teen who has been blind since birth, discovers one night that his existence is not all that ordinary- and is thrown into a parallel world- ‘Alternus’!”

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Story

Mirage by N6023 offers an interesting concept that might leave you a bit confused in the beginning. The overall story is easy to follow well enough, but some of the wording choices makes it difficult to discern details and it may leave you asking, “Wait. What did I just read?”

explanation
This is actually as far as this conversation goes. We never hear about it again. I’m hoping it’s reintroduced because I’m unclear on what is happening.

The first chapter offers a great introduction to the characters and ends with a cliff hanger. N6023 does an excellent job dragging in the audience and leaves them wanting more. For the most part, Mirage is paced very well through each chapter and has enough action scenes to keep the excitement going.

first chapter

The comic is still fairly young, with the main plot just being introduced at the time of this review. With 11 chapters out already, this may seem like a slow start, but the chapters are short and the plot does progress before this point. Most of the story is build up and important explanations on plot concept. N6023 has done an awesome job of pacing out introductions to characters and worlds which may make the plot technically move slower, but it allows the reader to feel like it moves quickly without being blasted by a wall of boring informational text.

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Writing

This story really takes off and becomes more enjoyable with each page. The only issue I have is the grammar in the first few chapters. I find it easy to understand the overall plot, but a chore to read conversations when they could be worded better. Reworking the beginning into something a bit clearer maybe be helpful. In a lot of cases, rearranging the sentences is enough to make the conversations flow smoothly.

grammar
Just rearranging some of these sentences will make them feel less awkward.

As for spelling, there were a few errors, but not excessive. I was impressed with the writing as a whole, aside from the grammar mistakes -especially in the first few chapters.

spelling

There is also a lot of chit chat in this comic. Although it isn’t necessarily a bad thing, it should be noted and kept an eye on as you don’t want to overwhelm the readers with too much text on one page. It can be daunting to read something if it is full of fluff conversations or too many words to explain something important. My new favourite piece of advice seems to be “show don’t tell,” and I’m going to stick with that here as well.

Art

Mirage’s strongest point is definitely the art. This comic has a clean and professional look to it that will certainly be the initial attraction for a lot of readers. The black and white style is also very well done which makes the foreground and background distinguishable from each other.

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Clean lines, great paneling.

N6023 also showed no fear for capturing movement and expressions by highly exaggerating both of these. This is crucial to the style in this comic, and it works wonders for the story. The action scenes are that much more entertaining, and the emotional scenes pull you right into the moment.

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The use of shading was also manipulated to exaggerate these scenes, and there is one shot in particular that really gives you the full impact of raw emotion. Shading is something that can be a powerful tool if used correctly.

shading expressions

Conclusion

I enjoyed the overall concept of Mirage by N6023. I think this comic offers a lot of potential and it’ll be interesting to see where it goes from here. The writing may have needed a bit of work in the first few chapters, but it has definitely improved in the later ones. I can only imagine that N6023 will continue to improve as the comic progresses.


If you would like to check out Mirage by N6023, you can read it on Tapastic.